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Mistrusted paintings in corners,
Faces that start to pass the time,
Etched into civilization's lies,
Disconnection continues its ascent,
With the ranks slowly decaying,
Slain justification on a thread.

Inspiration lost in chains as walls rise,
Needs from commitment push against flesh,
As dedication causes thoughts to fall,
Gashed knowledge and wants broken,
Wealth and warmth are no compensation,
Hatred of the selfish to cause hatred of all.

Pressed against the metal as lines are crossed,
Space is invaded with no outer reference,
Lungs clamped to erase the anguish and disgust,
Self image reflects only one fraction of many volumes,
Wishes for the 'hellos' and 'good days' of those,
Returns intended for few that bother.

Why do I continue to smile?
Why does this country remain intact?
Why does the system never change?
Why does love sometimes pressure?
Why is peace nonexistent?
Why is stupidity more important?

"There is fear that the world will be in chaos in years to come, that is just a delusion for those that cannot see what is already happening right now"
I'm generally a happy person, but everynow and then i face both bitterness and confusion from factual knowledge. i don't quite know what my aim was with this, but i wrote it and here it is.
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scaryzwer Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
You got featured here: [link]
:D
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scaryzwer Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This. Is. Stunning! I'm speechless, and that's not my usual state! :XD:

Just keep on writing this way,because this is amazing!

I like it a lot!!
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CraigJonathonHill Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Well i'm currently collecting the inspiration for the next
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scaryzwer Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Good luck!
I'm currently waiting for you to write a new text!
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Corad Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009
I enjoyed reading this piece very much. It's similar to how I see things :) The world is in utter chaos, yet there are only some who see it that way. You've done an excellent job with this poem :D
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CraigJonathonHill Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
naw, you makeh me blursh
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WookieFragger Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2009
one or two little grammatical/spelling questions (none existent = nonexistent) and I'm not sure why dedication was capitalized. This is a creatively and fluidly expressed dark train of thought. It's scary when you get the idea that maybe...just maybe everything is not going to be okay.
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CraigJonathonHill Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, i have made the changes, and i appreciate the view and analysis
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waterpower26 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
This is your philosiphy or something?
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CraigJonathonHill Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
i think philosophy is too heavy a word for this type of poetry
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